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The world is a creature that is dying
Crying and whining in pain
It feels the wars and the corruption as well as the greed
And the world is filled with monsters
They’re polluting the poor world with crimes
But now the world is running out of time

The world is screaming for mercy
Desperately asking for a quick death
For the world is slowly dying
Just like the monstrous humans that it hosts
Its heart is slowly failing on the world
And soon it will collapse in on itself

Death happens everywhere despite the desperate plea
That comes from the mouth of the world
Life and Death doesn’t seem so important anymore
Liars and Hypocrites deny that they will do any harm
But it is them who are making the world scream some more

The world is screaming for mercy
Desperately asking for a quick death
For the world is slowly dying
Just like the monstrous humans that it hosts
Its heart is slowly failing on the world
And soon it will collapse in on itself

The world is whimpering in pain some more
Destroying the soul of the heart inside
Screams erupt from within the core
The people wonder what is making that noise
Before they shrug and declare that they do not care

The world is screaming for mercy
Desperately asking for a quick death
For the world is slowly dying
Just like the monstrous humans that it hosts
Its heart is slowly failing on the world
And soon it will collapse in on itself

The world is screaming for mercy
Desperately asking for a quick death
For the world is slowly dying
Just like the monstrous humans that it hosts
Its heart is slowly failing on the world
And soon it will collapse in on itself
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:icontommyboywood:
tommyboywood Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
take heart! Revelation 11:18; 21:3-5
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bodders1991 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
I... I think I will just take heart. Though you might not like one of my newer song/poems when it comes out.
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MzVPain Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Wow I see you had a major and true inspiration, you see what many see as they watch the news, and go from day to day. As I read this it reminds me of how our thoughts can be bombarded with words and images and we just want to record those, all raw and fresh. But please, take these words, and the images, study a couple of poetic forms, and see how rearranging your images can take this poetry to the next level. Decide if you are warning, story telling, satirizing or even confessing (metaphorically of course). Then try to fit it into a template without chaging it too much. There are poetic forms which allow for repetition and expression. Your choice of words was desperate reminding me of the beginning of the Lord of the Rings: Fellowship. It began talking about as the Earth how she feels she is tired (I hope I am remembering the right movie.) A choice of words which provokes images makes it, now arrange it so non dreamers can understand it! It's in your language, translate it!
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bodders1991 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Translate it for the non-dreamers?
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MzVPain Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Professional Writer
anyone reading who is not, as you, an artist. You have never met someone who doesn't dream,who has no dreams,or whose zeal is fade? You are their painter,splash the color into their world even if only during your poem, portraying your perception to them.
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bodders1991 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Unfortunately, even if I did that a lot of people still wouldn't care, so it's not like a lot of difference could be done either way.

Besides, I would rather keep my style of writing than change it for someone else. I wouldn't enjoy writing otherwise.
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MzVPain Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Professional Writer
What I said was not to tailor your writing to my tastes, but to bring out your theme in vivid language to present to people who can't see your vision. Hope I didn't offend you VPAIN
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MatrixEngineer Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
Then, why are "we" still watching? Is it because we all have greed, acting to survive physically, but burying down our minds and human virtues?
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bodders1991 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
If I knew the answer to that, I would tell you. Humanity as a whole doesn't do a lot to cover itself in glory unfortunately, but at the same time things can to be done, yet nothing is actually done about it.

Everyone has a side that makes them out to be a monster.
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MatrixEngineer Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
I hope my question did not offended you. I just wondered whether you really feel what you wrote and question yourself:)

Actually, I kind of know the answer, but I gotta question it more before sharing.
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